Mind Wide Open

Mind Wide Open
Lost in translation are the fragments of this beautiful life.

Saturday, November 21, 2009

They can't have it both ways, can they?


I prefer to vent in poetry form
It's not the best venue or even the norm
But it's my best way of calming the storm...

Allow me first to clarify my haste
Before another breathe does go to waste
abhor most this sour after-taste

So here my venting must take wing to flight
Lest my spirit rage on against the fight
And one more word is uttered forth in spite...
* * *
I really did try telling everyone
Just how scary a place my mind could be
when left to discovery all alone
Do you think anyone listened to me?

Of course it got darker as I went deep
What did all of them expect me to see?
A calm ocean? An embankment un-steep?
Not the decaying dead pieces of me?

I never did like the dark very much
Anyone who knows me, knows this is true
Yet encouraged I went: “Look but don’t touch.”
Was this brilliant advice even thought through?

So here I stand, more confused than before
While criticisms begin to ensue
Wishing I had never opened this door
Only to hear, "What's the matter with you?"

8 comments:

  1. I really did try telling everyone

    Just how scary a place my mind could be

    when left to discovery all alone

    Do you think anyone listened to me?


    BEAUTIFUL, and easy to identify with (well, for me it is :)). You did a nice job with this poem. I can feel the frustration and the tension. It pulls me into a place where life is out of balance and emotions are bursting from a once-still surface. Yet I sense HOPE here, as well, as HOPE can only be discovered when one admits to the lack of it.

    And ironically, when I went to post this, the code word was "spent." LOL My mind is spent right about now. Time for bed!

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  2. I cannot express how refreshing it is to find a world where bilateral relating exists. I am blessed.

    Venting in journalized poetry is a way for me to get it out and try to understand it; all while keeping a marginal anonymity and speaking over the average person's head. It works for me, and well.

    And thank you for seeing hope in me ;)

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  3. <3 I do see much hope! You're walking the balance beam, but you WILL NOT FALL into the abbess! I know I spelled that wrong. ;)

    You're writing is wonderful, and because it covers such depth of human emotion, it is a comfort to read. I am always happy to find a new poem on your page.

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  4. Aw, wait.............you've got me speechless; now there's an accomplishment! Thank you.

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  5. :D And hey, let's make a faux-toast to US, finishing the LAND submission ON TIME!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  6. Yes, we did it; which is more than all the other blowfish in the sea managed to accomplish ;) So here's to putting foot to word and flight to both.

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